Please critique my flier

In my opinion Bro, you need to niche down a little more then join the conversation already going on in your perspective client's head. For instance: Instead of sending out a blanket flier to thousands of restaurants in my area, I sent out XX fliers to Burger King owners aimed at a special promotion for them. Here is the video that was at the top of the webpage that they were sent to from the flyer.

http://video.google.com/videoplay?docid=-4086620480372461596#

The webpage was a looooong form sales letter that spoke of their needs and wants and concerns.. then, finally at the end told them of how I may be able to solve their problem.

To sum it up, niche down a little more then go after them.
 
new card

So I called a couple of friends here in AZ and they reaffirmed my fears about this card being offensive to someone so I have decided to scrap it. unfortunately here in AZ there is a pretty strong political climate ever since the passing of the immigration bill. And since the guy looks like he might be an illegal immigrant I am not going to use it. I do not want to offend anyone so unless I can find another pic of a funny guy vacuuming this card is history.


Here is the new one, it doesn't have the funny factor and I am finding it difficult to create a strong call to action with it But it does look good and you can tell what the card is about just by looking at the front unlike my first proof.

for some reason it is not letting me upload this new proof so ill try it again later.

thanks for all the suggestions so far though
Ryan
 
HotShot_Anthony said:
In my opinion Bro, you need to niche down a little more then join the conversation already going on in your perspective client's head. For instance: Instead of sending out a blanket flier to thousands of restaurants in my area, I sent out XX fliers to Burger King owners aimed at a special promotion for them. Here is the video that was at the top of the webpage that they were sent to from the flyer.

http://video.google.com/videoplay?docid=-4086620480372461596#

The webpage was a looooong form sales letter that spoke of their needs and wants and concerns.. then, finally at the end told them of how I may be able to solve their problem.

To sum it up, niche down a little more then go after them.
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Not exactly sure how I could niche down, I only go after residential house cleaning accounts? Maybe direct it per neighborhood or community??
Ryan
 
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